Monochromatic

November 4, 2010

(This week’s Six Word prompt is ‘change’. I decided to focus on a secondary meaning of the word. The only ‘six word’ section is at the very end. Yes, I cheated.)

The day we brought Toby home from the hospital, we paused en route to the parking lot at a small reflecting pool outside the entrance. It was a gloomy winter afternoon, the sky a low ceiling within reach, a coat of silver left too long unpolished. I had to squint to isolate the thread-thin demarcation between stone and cloud and steel-colored water, balancing their disparities like one would separate egg whites in a bowl.

It was oddly peaceful. Like treading water.

Under the surface, the dull-green bottom of the pool was covered in pennies like thousands of copper-covered candies waiting to be unwrapped, layered like seconds in the hour. Someone (probably not me) fished through their purse for spare change, and each boy tossed in a coin of his own after being prompted to make a wish for their new baby brother. I noticed Nate: his mouth was moving in a silent frown even as he threw; when I asked him why, he said he was counting…weighing his chances against the number of wishes already littering the bottom of the pool, holding their respective places in line.

Literal, linear boy.

Later, there was more, however: to the frown, to the creased five-year-old brow. He told me as much from under the dark confines of his blankie that night, the confessional of his preschool-hood.

Mom, I didn’t wish for Toby.
Instead, I wished I could fly.

{ 31 comments… read them below or add one }

1 Life As I Know It November 4, 2010 at 6:23 am

oh my goodness, I love the words that come from a five year old. So honest and innocent.
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2 Amy November 4, 2010 at 11:42 am

Yes, kids that age are so organic! Thanks for stopping by!

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3 Rudri November 4, 2010 at 7:13 am

Beautiful imagery in this piece. And the words from your five year old – raw and honest.
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4 Amy November 4, 2010 at 11:42 am

Thank you!

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5 TheKitchenWitch November 4, 2010 at 7:32 am

I love this! The honesty and earnestness of children.

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6 Amy November 4, 2010 at 11:42 am

Yes, kids are so unfiltered and raw. I love it.

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7 Yuliya November 4, 2010 at 8:57 pm

Followed you over from Kitchen Witch. Beautiful writing, “the confessional of his preschool-hood” just deliciously evocative! Can’t wait to read more.
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8 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:42 pm

Glad you found me! KitchWitch is awesome; I love her stories accompanying her recipes. So rich in real life truth.

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9 Emily November 4, 2010 at 9:50 pm

This was sweet, and of course I’m touched by the force of his emotions, but I think my favorite part was that he was weighing his wish-fulfillment chances against the number of wishes already made. What a rare insight into that growing mind! What an intense and lovely little boy!
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10 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:41 pm

I think that was my favorite part as well. I felt it was quite insightful, too! He is an intense boy…still. Thanks for stopping by!

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11 Molly@Postcards from a Peaceful Divorce November 5, 2010 at 6:55 am

Yes the imagery is beautiful and the way you told the story was very touching.
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12 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:40 pm

Thank you! It’s something I’ve never forgotten!

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13 Caroline November 5, 2010 at 7:50 am

Oh, I laughed out loud! I’m glad you cheated, it was totally worth the pay off at the end. Very nice post.
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14 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:40 pm

Thank you! Sometimes the six word limit just won’t work!

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15 Brook November 5, 2010 at 8:46 am

careful observations and your talent for verbalizing them shine today.
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16 Elle November 5, 2010 at 10:44 am

From the mouth of babes…..
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17 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:38 pm

Exactly! Glad you stopped by Elle!

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18 The Exception November 5, 2010 at 11:49 am

Kids are amazing.
This was such a great post – I was right there! Thanks for cheating.

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19 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:36 pm

Sometimes, you have to cheat! Thanks for reading!

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20 Melissa November 5, 2010 at 2:12 pm

This is beautiful! Such a well-drawn scene, so full of life. And truth. Little-boy truth. I love it.
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21 Amy November 5, 2010 at 2:36 pm

Isn’t little boy truth the best truth? Thanks for stopping by!

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22 Leslie November 6, 2010 at 7:27 am

Organic and earnest, for sure. Kids are so poignant in their simple confessions and curiosity – so many opportunities for reflection for us.
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23 Amy November 6, 2010 at 1:44 pm

Yes, if I didn’t have kids, I’d be missing so much in terms of paring life down the the simplest form, you know? It’s a gift they give us.

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24 Christine November 6, 2010 at 11:02 am

You held me right there. I could feel it, and I sighed! Lovely.
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25 Amy November 6, 2010 at 1:41 pm

Thank you, Christine! Have a nice weekend!

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26 Angelia Sims Hardy November 6, 2010 at 2:32 pm

Can’t blame him there. You only get one wish, one toss. Flying sounds so much cooler than a new baby brother.

:-)
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27 Amy November 8, 2010 at 7:30 am

Totally! That’s true! A kid will be a kid! Thanks for stopping by!

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28 Cheryl @ Mommypants November 6, 2010 at 7:26 pm

Beautiful imagery. And the guilt of the very young… priceless.

Hope nano is going well..

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29 Amy November 8, 2010 at 7:30 am

Thank you, Cheryl! And lol, I JUST posted about NaNo. Eeep. Not happening for me this year! How’s it going for you? Hopefully better!!

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30 Dumb Mom November 7, 2010 at 12:50 pm

I wish I could fly too!
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31 Amy November 8, 2010 at 7:29 am

Me too. Definitely!

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