(This week’s Six Word prompt is ‘change’. I decided to focus on a secondary meaning of the word. The only ‘six word’ section is at the very end. Yes, I cheated.)
The day we brought Toby home from the hospital, we paused en route to the parking lot at a small reflecting pool outside the entrance. It was a gloomy winter afternoon, the sky a low ceiling within reach, a coat of silver left too long unpolished. I had to squint to isolate the thread-thin demarcation between stone and cloud and steel-colored water, balancing their disparities like one would separate egg whites in a bowl.
It was oddly peaceful. Like treading water.
Under the surface, the dull-green bottom of the pool was covered in pennies like thousands of copper-covered candies waiting to be unwrapped, layered like seconds in the hour. Someone (probably not me) fished through their purse for spare change, and each boy tossed in a coin of his own after being prompted to make a wish for their new baby brother. I noticed Nate: his mouth was moving in a silent frown even as he threw; when I asked him why, he said he was counting…weighing his chances against the number of wishes already littering the bottom of the pool, holding their respective places in line.
Literal, linear boy.
Later, there was more, however: to the frown, to the creased five-year-old brow. He told me as much from under the dark confines of his blankie that night, the confessional of his preschool-hood.
Mom, I didn’t wish for Toby.
Instead, I wished I could fly.












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oh my goodness, I love the words that come from a five year old. So honest and innocent.
Life As I Know It recently posted..What Next
Yes, kids that age are so organic! Thanks for stopping by!
Beautiful imagery in this piece. And the words from your five year old – raw and honest.
Rudri recently posted..In Between Two Languages
Thank you!
I love this! The honesty and earnestness of children.
Yes, kids are so unfiltered and raw. I love it.
Followed you over from Kitchen Witch. Beautiful writing, “the confessional of his preschool-hood” just deliciously evocative! Can’t wait to read more.
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Glad you found me! KitchWitch is awesome; I love her stories accompanying her recipes. So rich in real life truth.
This was sweet, and of course I’m touched by the force of his emotions, but I think my favorite part was that he was weighing his wish-fulfillment chances against the number of wishes already made. What a rare insight into that growing mind! What an intense and lovely little boy!
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I think that was my favorite part as well. I felt it was quite insightful, too! He is an intense boy…still. Thanks for stopping by!
Yes the imagery is beautiful and the way you told the story was very touching.
Molly@Postcards from a Peaceful Divorce recently posted..Happy Election Night
Thank you! It’s something I’ve never forgotten!
Oh, I laughed out loud! I’m glad you cheated, it was totally worth the pay off at the end. Very nice post.
Caroline recently posted..Vamping
Thank you! Sometimes the six word limit just won’t work!
careful observations and your talent for verbalizing them shine today.
Brook recently posted..Six Word Friday- Change
From the mouth of babes…..
Elle recently posted..Six Word Fridays- Change
Exactly! Glad you stopped by Elle!
Kids are amazing.
This was such a great post – I was right there! Thanks for cheating.
Sometimes, you have to cheat! Thanks for reading!
This is beautiful! Such a well-drawn scene, so full of life. And truth. Little-boy truth. I love it.
Melissa recently posted..six word fridays- change
Isn’t little boy truth the best truth? Thanks for stopping by!
Organic and earnest, for sure. Kids are so poignant in their simple confessions and curiosity – so many opportunities for reflection for us.
Leslie recently posted..ch-ch-ch-changes
Yes, if I didn’t have kids, I’d be missing so much in terms of paring life down the the simplest form, you know? It’s a gift they give us.
You held me right there. I could feel it, and I sighed! Lovely.
Christine recently posted..Dream a little dream
Thank you, Christine! Have a nice weekend!
Can’t blame him there. You only get one wish, one toss. Flying sounds so much cooler than a new baby brother.
:-)
Angelia Sims Hardy recently posted..Live- Love- Laugh – Our First Dance
Totally! That’s true! A kid will be a kid! Thanks for stopping by!
Beautiful imagery. And the guilt of the very young… priceless.
Hope nano is going well..
Thank you, Cheryl! And lol, I JUST posted about NaNo. Eeep. Not happening for me this year! How’s it going for you? Hopefully better!!
I wish I could fly too!
Dumb Mom recently posted..Holiday Gift List for Awesome People Win a Wii Game
Me too. Definitely!